On Mon, 15 Jun 1998, Gary Kleppe wrote:

	I had heard, but didn�t believe it. Shampoo was gone; he had fought
with Mousse and had lost. He actually lost.

Um... Shampoo's a she, not a he.

Actually, Gary, I think the intent (at least in the way I read it) was
that Mousse had defeated Ranma as a suitor for Shampoo.  Ie Mousse defeats
Shampoo; Mousse must defeat Ranma; Ranma "let's" Mousse win.

Of course, changing the line to refer to Shampoo can work.

BTW, please word-wrap at 70-80 characters per line, and use only
non-directional "straight quote" marks. If you're not sure whether your
formatting is correct, test-mailing to yourself is a good way to check.

Always.  Wierd ascii characters and directional quotation marks can be
very annoying.

Overall, very nice emotional drama story. The feeling came through quite
well. Just fix up all the technical problems (and pleeeeeeeeeze take out
the "Ukyo is Ranma's best friend" BS ^_^) and you'll have a winner.

Oldest friend, yes.  Best friend?  I am uncertain if there is anyone in
the Ranmaverse that can qualify as a best friend for him...


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