Sorry, Donny... there were some nice moments in this fic, but the
blatant character bias in it ruined the fic for me. From the title
onward, most of this fic reads like an attack on Akane. Most of the
story harps on her bad points, while pretty much ignoring everyone
else's.

I'm not saying I won't like your fic unless you have the same favorite
characters as me. But I don't want to read something that (IMO) is less
a story than an attack on one of these characters. Besides, you've shown
already that you can do better.


Gary Kleppe
http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics