you wanted C&C: *GRANTED*
     hey, somebody get that demon/god black cat outta here! Tollltiiiiiirrrr!

Ranma 1/2 : Kasumi's Wish Chapter Five
Created by Long Ngo
Started April 7, 1998
Finished May 18, 1998
Reavised May 20, 1998

revised
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 Even after a year of watching Ranma in action, it 
still amazed Kasumi how good he was.  

 the end of this sentence sounds a little clumsy. maybe
use something other than "good" to indicate what aspect
of the Art she's impressed with.

"Ranma, Akane, Saotome-san, please come in.  
*Splash!!* 

needs a quotation mark here before the sound effect.

"Tousan and Nabiki are about to wake up."  Smiling 
at the sight, Kasumi headed back upstairs.

i'm not entirely sure about the word Tousan. i know 
Oto-san is one of the words for father but i'm not sure
about Tousan. i've seen it in other fanfics, but that
doesn't necessarily mean its a proper word. unfortunately not in my dictionary
either.

The fact that his middle daughter had the same dream 
did not registered in Soun's mind.  "I'm glad that 

register. 

The panda was waving a sign, "I can explain."

you might consider having some sort of bracketing device
for the signs other than quotes. makes it easier to tell
in long conversations.

"For an old man he has a very strong grip," Ranma
muttered in between his gasps of air.  Looking down
at the man who had him in a death hug, "Can
you please let go!  I can't breathe."  
In Soun's current state, Ranma's shout went unheeded.

Ok, maybe this is nitpicking, but if he's gasping for
air then shouting is not terribly likely. trust me on
this, i've got respiratory problems myself.

Following his eldest great suggestion, Soun started 

eldest's

"So cold water activates the curses and hot water >>reverses it?"  Soun

asked while pouring the entire >>content of hot water on Genma.  Ranma was a
boy

at the moment and did not need the hot water.

pouring the what? use the container name or something like 'poured all the hot
water'

Nabiki quickly thought of a way to save herself

>from marrying Ranma. "He difinitely wants Akane."

definitely

family.*  Akane soon glared at Ranma.  *It's all
his fault I have to do this.*

the sentence reads better if you take "soon" out.

*I know how Kasumi usual acts but this is strange

usually

Is this boy be the reason Kasumi was blushing before?

reads better without the "be"

everything in my powers to get them together if not 

use the singular power. also a comma after "not"
i don't know about Nabiki's comment of handsome. she
seemed to focus on cute in the first episode. the two
aren't precisely the same.
IMO: Megumi Hayashibara- CUTE. Kotono Mitsuishi- beautiful. Seira Tzuyuzaki-
Sexy. not the same thing, not always. or for an anime example, Urd is NOT
someone you could describe as cute.

Soon their two family would be united.

families

The two Norms turned their attention back to the 

Ahhhgghhhh it's Norm from Cheers?! oh, Norns. nevermind

To be continued

damn straight, you better continue it!
 i wanna see how Kasumi handles Shampoo's entry into the
revised timeline at the very least!