Hi, I'm sitting here with eyelids drooping so that I can tell you how 
much I like your fic.  It is one of those title which I am always very 
happy to see in the mail.  Your characterization was very good, 
especially for Reiko, who was a previously superficial first-episode 
character, into a very lifelike, (or is that deadlike?)  character whose 
presence I could feel off of the page.  Although I have never seen La 
Blue Girl, you made the character come alive for me, and I have a strong 
connection with Kamiri, probably stronger than if I just watched the 
anime.  
	Your conclusion was good as well, leaving obvious room for a sequel, 
which you will write if you have good ideas, right! (please, pretty 
please)  You showed the obvious damage which occurred to Yohko's psyche.  
The conscious hand reaching back to Reiko was a _very_ nice touch. 
	 I did think the sudden relationship between Yohko and {Hidaki?} was a 
bit spontaneous.  I don't think he would have developed a huge crush in 
the small amount of time he remembered her actions.  Perhaps if you 
introduced him earlier, or perhaps introduced him earlier.  I don't 
think he plays a worthy role in this fic.  I was almost dissapointed to 
see him.  The information he gave them about the supposed death of Reiko 
during the dark queen incident didn't seem important at all, since they 
obviouly knew she was alive and kicking (hard!).  When he distracts 
Yohko in the end I think he detracts from the emotional impact of her 
plight. A handsome boy could not make Yohko forget the days of torment 
she suffered at Reiko's hands, at least not that fast.  This is also 
Yohko's first defeat, and without the near rescue of her friends whe 
would be taking her place at the Dark Queen's side.  The emotional 
impact could probably be strengthened by staying within the circle, 
perhapy Chi could help, since she has felt a little of seductive power 
through the succubus.
	Ahh well, I was kind of hoping she would go to the dark side and Reiko 
would win, but that's just my morbid dark side speaking.  You should be 
able to shut it in a box with a fair amount of success, it only breaks 
free and rampages every so often.  Wait, I wasn't supposed to type that.  
Doki!  Oh, well.
	Wait a minute, I can't believe I wrote that! Where do I get off acting 
so intelligent?  Anyway, thank you so much for this wonderful fic, and I 
hope you continue to dazzle us with beauties like this in the future.
									Chris 'Fizban' Kelly

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