On Tue, 28 Apr 1998, Free mage wrote:

shredding the weapon within seconds into metallic confetti that 

sprayed

into the air.

The ordering "shredding - within seconds - into confetti" sounds
somewhat bad - but placing "within seconds" last or after "confetti"
is no better. Hmm. There *should* be a better solution.

How about, "... paper, and within seconds he had shredded the weapon 
into metallic confetti that sprayed into the air."

The whole reason this sounds awkward is that the word 'that' is not
gramatically correct.  If the information that is added to the sentance is
important, the word 'that' is used.  However, the fact that the junk has
been spraying in the air doesn't really modify the main content, so the
word should be 'which'.


-Natsume Ranma Ranma
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Oyaji-san!  Mallet-san!
I authorize you to take...MALLET ONE!