Subject: Re: [FFML] [Ranma][Short] SODB
From: Patrick McClanahan
Date: 4/29/1995, 1:07 AM
To: Dan Root
CC: ffml@fanfic.com

	Funny, funny. However, you might want to shorten the set-up next
time, since it wasn't substantially different from the original, or from
any number of alternate reality retakes on that first meeting.


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The sign turned around with no other obvious motion on the part of
the spotted ursine.  'You must be mistaken.'


	"Ursine" is a colorful, entertaining term, and I would normally
applaud its use. However, in this context, it seems to directly identify
Genma as a bear. Pandas actually belong to the raccoon family (Procyonidae?
I vaguely recall raccoons being _Procyon lotor_), and I think the
scientifically correct noun would be "the spotted procyine," or something
to that effect.

	Thog say, "when Thog pick nit, nit know it been PICKED!"

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