At 16.59 30.3.1998 -0800, Tim Williams wrote:

Also, the Slayers/Ranma crossover title something like "Half a
Sorceress" has a good bit of an influence on this thing, which I didn't
realize till I'd already decided to write it this way.  Well, imitation
is the sincerest form of flattery and all. 

Heh. I'm flattered. ^_^ And yes, the name of the story was Half a Sorceress.
(chapter 4 is coming out soonish, I hope. [plugplugplugplug])
Anyway, I'm not the first one who has crammed two people inside one body,
so I can't really claim to have invented that idea. 
I stole it from a scifi short story I read five or six years ago. Can't
remember the name of the story, though...

And I'm relatively sure that this fic has NOT been done before.  

Well, there is this one fic where Serenity and Usagi (though she was the DiC
version
in that fic, IIRC) shared a body, but it was Princess Serenity of Silver
Millennium,
not the Neo-Queen in that one. And I can't remember the name of that
story either. <sigh>

<story snipped>

Interesting idea, so whatever happened in chapter 1 threw the Senshi into
another
universe? I can understand it in Mercury's case, since she was right next to
the Black Hole that (probably) caused it, but you should think up some
technobabble
explanation on why the other senshi ended up there too. 

Then, on to a bit of criticism: Both Serenity and Usagi took what happened 
a little calmly, in my opinion. When I wrote the first parts of Half a
Sorceress,
I spent quite a lot of time agonizing over just how shocked Ranma and Lina would
be. After all, suddenly finding somebody else inside your head has to be one
of the most shocking experiences of your life, even if that somebody else was
another version of you. 
While it's true that Serenity and Usagi would probably get along better than
Lina and Ranma (who both have hair-trigger tempers), Usagi would panic, and 
panic bigtime. Especially if she's a 'mundane' one who hasn't ever even
heard of Sailor Moon. I can see Serenity keeping her cool, though, since
she's over thousand years old. She must have seen lots of weirdness in her
days. Also, unless Sailor Mars' consciousness totally overlaid Rei's, Rei would
be fighting her with teeth and nail, at least initially. 
Two people in one body situation is _hard_ to write, so be careful. ^_^
Anyway, you've done pretty good work so far. 
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