I liked this one a lot. A yearning for the simple pleasures of childhood
is something I think most of us can relate to -- even those of us who
are former children. :-)

The writing was generally good. It seemed to me in a couple places that
it worked a little too hard trying to say things in a clever way (clever
narration is fine, but shouldn't be forced). Also, I think it loses
something by having Ranma explicitly explain what was going through his
head at the end. I think a more indirect way of revealing this could be
more effective.

All in all, very good work!


Gary Kleppe
http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics