Anand Rao <anandr@earthlink.net> wrote:

This is a draft... hope ya all like it!

Well, I don't really like to see Nodoka characterized as the all-wise
enernally-loving mother, but that notwithstanding, I really liked this
story.

There were a fair number of typos, and I -think- you went a -little-
overboard with the -emphasis marks- in the -dialog-; these are things
you might want to look at in the next draft.


Gary Kleppe
http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics