From: Thomas R Jefferys <wyrm@mail.utexas.edu>

there was hard steel, and barely controlled anger. "Proof? You want
proof, Ranma? Here's proof." She attacked.
     Ranma was the best martial artist in the world, bar none. He has
been practicing for over thirty-three years, and is a nationally
recognized Grandmaster of Kempo-Karate, Aikido, and Musabetsu Kakuto
Saotome-ryu.
     He was beaten in less then a minute.

You really need to expand this a little.  I don't want to reopen the 
whole Ranma vs. vampires debate but just saying Ranma is beaten isn't 
enough.  How about showing us some of this awesome power Shampoo is 
supposed to have?  Tell us exactly how she beats Ranma.  Also, I want to 
get a better idea of *Ranma's* power level.  OK, Shampoo can beat him.  
How would he fare against a more "ordinary" kindred?
 As it stands, Shampoo's easy victory just wasn't very convincing for 
me.  I know some people really hate writing fight scenes, but please try 
and show us a little more here.

-------
Matthew Campbell

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