Wow! ^_^  I'm so happy I got MST'ed!  Shortly before the Crash, Eric Adams
wrote:

Eric: ahh good old C. Toler. we've missed her work since that story with
Ryouga and the mushrooms.

*sniff*  It's so good to be remembered! ^_^

       "Guess I'll be going..." Ranma said, backing away as Tofu pulled
out his stethoscope.

Eric: you know i dont think i've ever seen the good doctor use a stethoscope
before.

D'oh!  I can't believe I forgot to mention this in the notes!!!  *^_^*  I
changed the Doctor's occupation a little, for what I hope are obvious
reasons.  In this story, he's a physician, not a chiropracter.

       "You got bit by something," Ranma asserted.
       "Looks like an animal bite," Tofu mused.  "I doubt that you could
have lost a significant amount of blood from a wound like this, though.
That wouldn't explain the fainting incident or your anemic appearance."

Eric: oh lets all just JUMP to the obvious.  its an evil vampire.

In the original _Dracula_, the reader knows what's going on long before
even Van Helsing does.

Sarah: hah I'll take care of him... you'll see... bam bam...slam wam.

Thank you, ma'am. ^_~

Ryoga
stared after them as they walked out of the room, then gazed with distaste
at the flimsy gown.

Sarah: aww but you'll look cute.

He's always cute. ^_~

       "Well, we'll do some tests.  Anemia can be caused by all sorts of
things...poor diet, iron deficiency, overactive spleen..."

Eric: overactive spleen?  really?
Sarah: i never even realized a spleen existed i thought it was just
something you say to  be funny.

Nope, that's what my doctor tells me.  The spleen governs the structure of
the blood, I think; an overactive spleen would be destroying red blood
cells at too great a rate. ^_^

       "I think it would be best if you stayed in a house tonight," Tofu

Eric: preferably one that you've been invited to.

Heh! ^_^

       "You shouldn't be alone tonight," Tofu said sternly, "wherever you
end up sleeping."
       "Yes, sir," Ryoga said glumly.

Sarah: oh no Ryouga answers to authority! my image of the badboy rebel is
shattered!

One of my prereaders suggested this might be a little OOC, but I think
Ryoga is respectful of his elders, for the most part.  He only seems to be
rude when people try to cook him, and even then he's less rude than Ranma.
^_~

       "Don't you dare mock me!" Ryoga snapped.

Eric: Don't you dare mock me!
Cubicle: Don't you dare mock me!
Staple Plus: Don't you dare mock me!

Do you really think that's wise? ^_~

mother gave him a Look, and he reluctantly pulled the bandannas off and
dropped them in a heap on the bedside table.

Sarah: and how big was the heap?

I leave that to the reader's imagination.  Depends on how many bandannas
you think he wears. ^_^

turned there was no-one there to be seen.  He could hear the Voice begin to
chuckle.

Sarah: a tee hee kind of chuckle or a bwahahaha kind of chuckle?
Eric: i think one of those is a giggle.

"Tee-hee" is a giggle, and "Bwahahaha" is more of a guffaw.  The Voice just
chuckles.  Kind of like, "Mm-hm-hm-hm," I guess.  ^_~

       Ranma led the way to the Doctor's office cheerfully.  Akane hadn't
been angry last night, thanks to Dr. Tofu's phone call.  She had

Eric: waahoo! the writer exercises common sense!
Sarah: wheee.

It's in the Rules.  Once in a Blue Moon, I have to at least appear to
possess common sense. ^_~

an iron deficiency, but it won't hurt if you try to include red meat and
spinach or broccoli."

Sarah: yuck spinach and brocoli thats torture enough.

Ryoga always eats his veggies.  They make him big and strong. ^_~

had less blood to start with.  He sat up slowly and thanked the doctor, and
promised him that he would rest.

Eric: ummm yeah anyways isnt it kinda dangerous to do that kidn of thing?

Tofu's a professional, don't try this at home. ^_~  I should point out that
it's not like when you donate blood and they take a whole lot.  In this
case, Ryoga's only giving a tube or two at a time.  But yeah, when they
find out you're anemic, the first thing they do is take MORE blood from
you.  And if they can't find anything wrong with the sample, they take
still more to run a different battery of tests.

       "Oh, Ryoga," Akane gasped as they walked in the front door.  "You
look just awful!"
       "Hello... Akane," Ryoga said with a wince.

Eric: you'd think he'd feel worse about lying to her all the time.

He doesn't lie to her all the time.  He just doesn't correct her when she
makes false assumptions. ^_~

beating heart.  In a flash of insight, Ryoga realized that he was about to
faint again.

Sarah: he acts like tooms does sometimes.

Tooms?  Sorry, I don't get the reference.

       "Don't get up just yet," Akane said, laying a delicate hand on his
shoulder.  "You still look really pale."

Sarah: well its part of anemia..

She means he got even paler when he fainted.  He still looks a little
whiter than he did before he passed out. ^_^

.>Eric: well Its really good... i mean I cant give too much criticism on it

cuz i think its fine the way it is.

Thanks! *^_^*

Sarah: No complaints from either it doesnt suck,

No, that's the next part. ^_~

its well written and well
paced.  Though one small thing is that you seem to pick on Ryouga a lot...
*taps her foot and glows green* why is that you think?  First the shrooms
and now the vampire... tsk...

Because he's my favorite. ^_^  Besides, why are you complaining?  I thought
you LIKED seeing him in the hospital gown...

Eric: luckily it strays far from my story so it assauges my feeligns of
guilt.

So how long till you post your story?  I'm curious to see what it was you
thought was similar.

Sarah: we noticed you have pt2 out as well, but we'll touch them later,
prolly tomorrow.  looking forward to it in fact.
Eric: later!

I'm looking forward to hearing what else you have to say.  Thanks again!

^_^

Cindy