Interesting idea, I found the concept of racial prejudice showing up at
such a late date and so effectively horrifying. I can only feel that
that Akane and the other Tendo's deserve that honorless version of
Kuno, a life with out love or honor seems fair under the circumstances.
There were many mistakes in grammar. I don't agree with all of the
reactions but that is just taste. no one seemed drastically OOC though
Nabiki and Kasumi seemed the furthest other than Kuno abandoning
Bushido.
I liked the story over all, it's greatest strengths were in the
emotions showed and the reactions to the emotions. if the rest of the
story is up to the standards of this one this may come close to
equaling Poison as a story. 

Rick Robinson

rik@cfanet.com