At 06:41 PM 11/10/97 -0300, Nobody wrote:

Here's some comments I have about the story. The following is regarding the
characterization of some of the characters, mostly Kasumi:

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This story takes place immediately after Ranma fights Cologne on the beach
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Beach? Its a winter resort with skiing and outdoor baths and stuff, not a beach
:P

That's anime. In the manga, it was a beach in summer. Go figure.

When it seemed like Ranma won, using Neko-Shampoo to trigger the legendary
Cat-Fu Technique, something went wrong, forcing everyone to revaluate their
                 ^^^^^^^^^
How about actually writing this scene out in a flashback or something?

She moved over to Ranma.  "Ranma?  You have to  start school again Monday.
We need to get you some new clothes."

New clothes? Why? Ranma wears his red silk shirt and black pants when he goes
to school as a guy, so why not a girl? :P

I have to admit, I've disliked this aspect of such stories too, the insane
need to dress Ranma as a girl when he's stuck as one. Hell, most of the
girls I know almost never wear dresses anyway. Sure, it might be different
in Japan, but it's still unpalatable to read.

[snip a great deal of stuff on Kasumi which, while I agree with(Kasumi
annoyed me greatly in this story), did still seem to be basically in 
character for her, sort of.]

Where was Ukyou during all of this? She wasn't mentioned once in all these
chapters. She should be trying to comfort Ranma, being the good friend (and
best cooking/looking/cutest/kindest fiancee he has :). 

That's because at that point in the manga story(I wouldn't know about
the anime, I presume it's the same), she hasn't appeared yet.

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