That was a really interesting take on the ranma story.  Up until the VERY
end, you captured the characterization very well.  You really HAVE watched
enough ranma to know what you are talking about...=)  However, the ending is
a little too abrubt.  You might want to try to smooth it out.  It's all too
sudden that the mairage license comes.  But otherwise, it's a very nice fic.
 Way to go, and keep it up.

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