On Wed, 28 May 1997, Richard Lawson wrote:
:
: All It Takes Is a Spatula
:
: by Richard Lawson
:
I like the title.
: "Of course. Gave her wholesale prices, too, just because she was so friendly.
Offered him a cookie, no doubt. :)
: Besides, she thought to herself as she threw on her cooking clothes, staring
: into mirrors was a good indication of narcissism, something she had no interest
: in becoming a part of.
Um, I don't have my dictionary here, but are you sure that
"narcissism" is right? It kinda sounds strange to me. [shrugs]
: Ranma continued as if she hadn't heard her. "I can't, I won't. I mean, I'm
: married. Even if I'm no longer worthy of her. Oh, Akane." This last was said
: in a voice full of despair.
"Oh, Akane" sounds *so* artificial. Try it without the "oh" and
trailing off.
: "Because..." Ranma trailed off, evidently thinking, then continued after a
: minute. "Because proposing to her was one of the best moments of my life. And
: we've had lots of other good moments, too. And I'd never trade any of that
: to... to live in this damn cave." Ranma laughed humorlessly. "And I am a
: stupid idiot, aren't I?"
"Aren't I"? I think not. Try "ain't".
Well. Still a good fic, just like the last time I saw it.
Sebastian