On Mon, 3 Feb 1997 23:09:34 -0800 Brendan O'Donnell wrote:

: A Ranma 1/2 Fanfict
: Surreal Genius
: By Brendan O'Donnell
: Part four

: 	"EWWW!" Noriko replied.  "Did you... what did you call it..."
: 	"Apply kinetic aversion treatment?"
: 	"Yeah, did you beat him senseless!"

That last sentence should be a question, I think.

Oh, and I like the term "kinetic aversion treatment".  :)


: 	"Well, I am a bit upset about her selling Kuno those photo's.  

"photos"


: You just get the right mix of alloys, focus some of your chi 
: through them, and voile."

"Voila"


: "You've got a great sister, your really 
: lucky."

"Your're"


: 	"Oh, Akane?" Kasumi said, noticing that she and Ranma were 
: finished with their breakfast.
: 	"Yes Oniichan?" Akane replied.

Err, that would be "Oneechan", unless this alternative universe is
a *lot* further from the original that you let on unitl now.  :)


: 	In PE class Ranma's classmates Daisaku and Hiroshi watched 
: as Ranma effortlessly outperformed the best acrobat in the class.

I think the name is usually spelled "Daisuke".  (It's from the
Anime as far as I know, so I can't be 100% sure)


: 	"Come on Saotome!"  Hiroshi said.  "You're living in her house, 
: you walk to school with her every morning, your the reason those guy's 
: who kept attacking her stopped."

that "your" should be a "you're", too.  Those pesky homophones
that the spellchecker doesn't catch, eh?  :)


: 	Nabiki looked at Ranma hardly.  "Look I may do some things 
: you fond honorably questionable for money, but I will die before I do 
: anything that would hurt either of my sisters."

You mean "find" here, I think.


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