Wow!  I really liked this story.]

I thought that the first two parts of the story were particularly good.
You generally made the senshi's English sound somewhat archaic without
using a lot of "thees" and "eths," which is nice.  (Most fiction I've
read that tries this ends up sounding like modern talk in fancy dress--
"Hey, man, let's me and thee go grab a bite at Ye Olde Steak House.")

It's especially effective because when Usagi makes her entrance, her
speech really sets her apart and characterizes her right away.

I'm of two minds about "La Morte de Rei."  I kind of like the high
tragedy of the original, but it always depresses me anyway, so I'm
not sure whether I like this version more...

I thought the Norse stuff dragged a bit, although that may be because I 
read the whole thing in one sitting.  Also, it felt like the characters
were all talking more like 20th century folk.

When you got back to the Arthurian stuff, though, with the three women
taking Rei to Avalon, I thought the story returned to excellence.

It was weird though, because I kept seeing guys in my head, because of
the names (especially since my name comes from one of them), and then
I would run acrfoss the pronoun and it would throw me :-).

Two nits:  I noticed "pouring over a text" somewhere.  I thought that
the 5 brothers (Agravaine, Gawaine, Mordred, et al) weren't "the 
Orkneys," but that they came from the Orkney Islands.  Wasn't their
clan name something else?  (You've obviously read your Mallory more
recently than I have, though; besides I might be thinking of something
I read from T. H. White or somebody else).

Gavin Steyn