On Fri, 27 Sep 1996, Sebastian Weinberg wrote:

 On Thu, 26 Sep 1996 00:16:15 -0500 (CDT) "Ranma Al'Thor" wrote:

: Princess Shan-pu and the faerie prince

:       The faerie ran away, as faeries do, and she chased the faerie back 
: to faerieland, across the eastern ocean.  She tried to hunt the faerie 
: girl, but the land was strange, and the local faeries tried to trick 
: her.  She met the faerie prince as his true male self, and fell in love 
: with him, but then learned he was the girl who had beaten her.  In 
: addition, he had been enslaved by three evil faeries.  A horrid 
: kawaiikune he could not beat in battle, a wicked chef who ate people, and 
: a deranged poison making faerie.  She tried to fight them, but they were 
: too strong for her.  She fled in despair, not knowing what to do.

Too fast, too fast!  This *seriously* has to be fleshed out more. 
As it stands, it reads like "Oh, I'll fast-forward to the good
bits now."

Most faery tales ARE fast paced.  That's why they fit in little picture 
books for kids well :)

:       Finally, she confronted the evil kawaiikune faerie.  It was torturing 
: her sweet prince, as was its greatest pleasure.  She got out her charm 
: and turned into a cat, so she could sneak up on it.  When she got close, 
: her prince saw her coming to rescue him and was inspired.  The 
: berserkergang came over him and he attacked the evil kawaiikune and 
: ripped her apart.

Do I read this right as:  Shampoo goes to Ranma in cat form, while
he's quarreling with Akane;  Ranma sees Shampoo and goes into
cat-fist mode;  Ranma turns Akane into Kitty chowder.

Yes.
You got it exactly.
 

: Clever Nabiki and the Ogres

: "Hey, there's an army out there!"  Everyone rushed to the window, and 
: Clever Nabiki switched breakfasts with Princess Tomboy.  
: 
:       Everyone came back to the table and laughed.  They could hardly 
: believe Clever Nabiki could have been so stupid as to mistake the passing 
: merchant for an army.  Everyone ate breakfast and Princess Tomboy dropped 

Hmmm.  I don't like it, even for a twisted fairy tale.  Also, with
her own cooking, Princess Tomboy would have developed a resistance
to toxins.

Akane shows no signs of resistance to her own cooking.  In fact, it's 
notable that we almost NEVER see her eating her own cooking.  Nor does 
she demonstrate any particular resistance to kodachi's poisons.



 > Also, I miss any references to 
Nabiki's photos of Ranma. > 

Couldn't think of anything appropriate.


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[Andrew becomes a slimy toad.  Karin acks and leaps back.  Terri and Hayao
blink.]

Hayao:  [thinking]  This has potential.

--The Eternal Game:  OAV #1.