Hmmm. Some very good ideas, but none of the are pursued to the
point of my satisfaction, due to the stream-of-consciousness
nature of the fic. Also, the dialogue becomes confusing at some
points, and it's not always easy to work out, who is speaking,
from the context (It's always *possible*, but it's extra work,
that could be spared the reader without much work, by inserting
some more attributions).
At the moment it shows great promise, but has to be cleaned up a
lot before it can fulfill them.
Sebastian