Not bad.  I like it. :-)  Definitely a great concept, hilarious and yet
touching at times.  It feels a bit awkward at times, though - I think you
got too caught up in the chaos bits to let us get an actual sense for how
the characters were really taking it.  It probably would have been helped
if you'd lessened the number of random characters running around (I think
Ryouga, Nabiki and Kasumi added little to the story, for instance, except
to exaggerate the chaotic atmosphere) and gone more into depth on what was
going on inside the heads of the remaining characters.  Also, I think that
Akane was a bit quick to jump to conclusions, even for her - I don't see
how she decided that 'Ranma and Ukyou go to talk in private, with Ukyou
looking sad' = 'Ukyou is pregnant by Ranma.'

All in all, though, it was pretty good even as is, and with a little
polishing and expansion, it could turn into something really good.  Maybe
even the start of a new series of fanfics. :-)  Keep up the good work.

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