Hmm... Cute... Weird... But cute... It looked like it was going to 
seriously hentai for a while, but you managed to keep it out of the 
gutter. 

I'd suggest making it a little less fragmented and trying to broaden 
it's focus. It seems a littled fixed on nudity, poker and Fr. Toufuu's
fantasies...

Anyway... It was okay... So keep at it... 

P-word.