Actually, Zen is glad that you are not planning on continuing this...  This
is extremely funny, nay hysterical, but Zen thinks that it would get old,
quickly.  On the whole, and excellent parody of a Mary Sue fic!

Just one question:  From the excerpt below...

Great.  I wondered if it was the wooden-sword-weilding dork,
or the super-strong directionally-challenged half-pig.  Either way,
I didn't want to know.

Okay, your character knows only what Akane knows abou the other characters
- she is, after all, his only source of information.  Akane doesn't know
about Ryouga's curse, else she would not have been so concerned about
P-chan at the start of the story.  So how does Richard know about the half
pig bit?

At least one of your SPB's (Super Powerful Beings) is Kun-chan, Zen would
guess, though they really bounce off of each other more like Cliak and
Clack, the Tappit Brothers....

Zen-


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