Subject: Pic's FF reviews
From: piccolo@cyber.atlanta.com
Date: 6/18/1996, 2:03 AM
To: fanfic@fanfic.com

sorry Misa stole your idea
Well, Its summer time again.  And I have nothing better to do so I guess
Ill read the fanfics in my HD.  Thats right, Im going to read every
single one that I can weed out in my HD.  It doesnt matter how old or
new that fanfic is.  Only exceptions are my fanfics and any fanfics that
starts in the middle of the storyline that I dont have before.  For
example, I wont read Sailor Moon Q pt 53 cuz I dont have the last 52
parts.  Here are my C & C so far on Ive read.  Ill rate it between 1-10.
 Higher the number the better it is.
The Attractiveness Factor Pt 1 & 2
by PhoneyNT
I dont read for grammar mistakes, I just read it for fun.  So I didnt
find any obvious grammar mistakes so grammar is okay.  Although it wasnt
structured well in the very beginning.  Grammar rating: 7
The story overall was average.  It was another story with Shampoo trying
to get Ranma.  A little twist by having a book encouraging Shampoo and
suprisingly Akane.  This looks  like its going to turn into a lemon
fanfic.  Story rating: 6
The characters were a little true to the original.  I dont think Akane
will be that open about her feelings towards Ranma.  But nice job having
Akane hold it in.  Shampoo reading a Romance Novel.  Hmmmm, highly
unlikely because of her Amazon background.  But makes up the plot.
Ranma, I thought, was mostly true to his character.  The characters were
developed nicely but seemed to develop too fast.
Character rating: 7
I think this was suppose to be funny.  But I never laughed out loud on
any parts.  However, it still had some of Takahashis humor.  Humor: 5
This  didnt seem like a serious fanfic so no rating here.
No Lemon yet.  no rating
overall rating:  6
Pilaf and the Brain : (Taking Over the) World Tour
by Andrea Paulinski Part 1
No obvious grammar mistakes.  Seemed like it had though.  Grammar
rating: 7
The story was boring.  Only the Pinky and the Brain part kept me going.
Story Rating:  5
The Characters I didnt know too well.  Im only familiar with DBZ not
dragonball.  So I didnt know if Pilaf, Mai, and Shuu was true to the
original.  Pinky and Brain didnt seem like it sometimes.  It seemed that
Pinky was Brains wife or something not a loyal servant.  Character
rating:  6
Humor, basic Pinky and the Brain humor was all I found.  Rating :5
No seriousness
No lemon
Overall:  5.7
Ah! Megami-sama:
Crossover pt 1
 by Chan Wei Lik
No grammar errors I found.  Little iffy on some parts though on the
structuring.  Grammar rating 8
Story I have no idea what is going on.  Besides Keichii feeling
nauseated and losing his memory.  It is only the first part.  I need to
find those other parts.  But it seemed to be going great.  Story rating:
7
Characters were true to the original.  It was developing nicely.  But
Keichii seem too macho here.  Character rating: 8
  Humor :5
no serious tones yet
no lemon
overall : 7
Im getting lazy here, sorry.  No more long explanations just ratings and
a few notes.
   Ranma Lemonade Punch #1: "Ranma Fever"
   by Paladin
Grammar error: 9 nice
Story: 7  It was excellent before the lemonfest.  Could have written it
w/o the lemon parts
Character: 5  I dont care if its a lemon.  But I dont think
Nabiki/Akane/Kasumi paring will do.
Humor:  8  Good Takahashi type humor.  Till the lemon fest
Serious:  none
Lemon:  7  Lemon.... try making it original
overall 7.2
 Thats it for now.