At 09:52 PM 6/16/96 -0700, you wrote:

Authors note- *Hello everyone, once again this is Entomorph bringing 
you yet another fanfic. will this one be good? i sure hope so. my first 
fanfic Kodiak's Fate was crap...but this one will not be, i promise. one 
thing i want to get clear though, i do not have access to a spell 
checker so don't write me babbling about my awful spelling ok?
-Entomorph (ento@powernet.net)*

Good start to the story.  You might want to write things that are not dialog
to show that they are actions or thoughts. Something like actions and
descriptiosn are enclosed in [] or dialog has the persons name in []
centered above what they say. In some places it took a second look to figure
out if it was a thought, action, or dialog.

for example:

ranma .....(What Ranma Did)....

ranma: said something.....      

Would get conufing (At least to me) at time.  Other then that looking
forward to more.

Tom

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