On Tue, 11 Jun 1996 21:02:45 -0700 (PDT) Mike W. Loader said:

: On Tue, 11 Jun 1996, Gustav Almstrom wrote:
:
: > >About that time travel thing... that police inspector at the end was
: > >going to say Kasumi Tendo got killed right? But if Kasumi's in the Tendo
: > >Dojo, how can she be in the bad guy's house?

How can you be in two places at once, when you're not anywhere at
all?

But seriously, apart from the usual paradox of causality that
ensues when you intentionally try to change the past, it's all
pretty clear.

: > I think the Nanbanmirror works like the timetraveling in Back to the Future,
: > i.e you can go back and meet yourself

Oooh, *good* that you mention _Back to the Future_.  If it works
like that, the change in the past prevents the alternative
timeline Kasumi came from and she never travels back and we don't
have to live with the fact that the poor alternative Kasumi dies
at the hands of the hoodlums (Gad, my heart was broken into a
thousand pieces, Mike, you monster!)

Perhaps you could add a line of Kasumi fading before the bombers'
eyes, instead of having her reunited with her mother (sweet though
it was)?  Ah, but then you couldn't write the ending like you did

: What he said. :) I'm gonna make this a bit more clear in the next draft.

No, it was really clear enough.  No need to write it on a sign and
whack it over the reader's head.  I *like* it if the author leaves
some brain activity for you to do. :)


Sebastian (loved it even with his heart in pieces.)
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