has no one read part 9? I guess these things happen when you write a 
lemon-- you get lots of interest... and when you go back to the story you
get a bit 0 :)!

oh well ... :)

misa

The whole thing so far has been good.  Some suggestions (as normal you may
decline)

1. Keep the idea about a second roll of film, have Nabiki wrestle with
herself some about giving it to Ranma and/or Akane.  Then have her give it
up, without a struggle.  This can give Nabiki some redemson

2.  As an effort to reform some (not totally) have Nabiki start making some
poised shots of her two main models.  Or she still takes the canaid shots,
but she has Akane and Ranma "edit for relise" the pictures.

3.  If you want to make sure the shots could be made, have Nabiki have a SRL
camera that she just got.

4.  I agree about the "I might make an exeption" line.  Put it in.

5.  Just for S&G's you might want to have Akane and Ranma develop the film
out of pure curiosity.  You could put in some lines like "Boy you sure have
a goofy look on your face right there."  "And your any better in this one?" ect.

6.  Put in some angst, but don't go overboard, please.

Thanks for your time.
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