On Sat, 11 May 1996, Andrew Stodden wrote:

                        "Who's life is it, anyway?"
                                    a
                         Beware of Falling Objects
                                production
                in association with the creative genius who is
                              Andrew Stodden

I see I've met someone as humble as myself :)

Whose humble? :)

Heh.
 

Ranma-chan: Two of them grabbed my arms, another two my legs. I
tried to break their grip, but this body isn't as strong as my
male one.

I have to disagree that Ranma wouldn't STILL be able to break their

[big snip]

they have a BIG edge.

But enough grousing about this.

Sigh... my story is a little mroe realistically weighted... rape 
gangs big enough to hurt Manga or Anime Ranma don't exist.

YEs, but given that one of the major plots involves Akane getting Ki 
powered, so realistic weighting doesn't make much sense...I'd say 
probably it ought to be a single rapist, but who does 
happen to be a skilled fighter...Ranma's more likely to underestimate a 
single person...

But ultimately, the story is about what happens after, not what happened 
here.  So I promise not to grouse more about it.
(For real, this time.)

Dr. Tofu: She was lucky, there is some tearing, but no real
damage. It didn't help much that she was virginal, but I don't
think that could have been avoided, all things considered. Akane,
I'm required to take a. sample.

a sample.

This is an odditty... Word 7 shows these as triple periods, denoting 
pause, but fails to export them correctly to msdos text, instead 
using the single period.... Until I fix this, it will all look like 
this... so if it seems wrong, just fill it in correctly yourself 
please... when the next update is posted, I'll fix it before sending 
it, but I'm not resending this

Check.
 

Dr. Tofu: Oh... um, Would you like a lift home then?

I don't think Tofu has a car, but then no one in Ranma 1/2 seems to
have a car :)

Who cares?  It's my fanfic, and he just won this car yesterday! :)

Fair enough. :)
 

Akane: <His bandanna? I never noticed that before.>

What?  I find it implausible she never noticed his bandana before...

She never noticed the fact that he is a pig before... :/

But why now?

[The two exchange a few more blows, blocking and shifting for
position.]

Akane: <I know! It looks exactly like the bandanna worn by
P-CHAN!>

I also find it implausible she hasn't noticed this before...Keep in
mind she has seen Ryouga get wet without turning into P-chan...

What? When? My Ranma 1/2 knowledge can be sketchy sometimes.

The magical soap story.  It let you get wet without changing, and thus 
Akane has seen him get wet without changing...one reason she's never 
figured it out :)
 

Also keep in mind Shampoo is substantially stronger than Akane...

Er... nami-ken! :) Not anymore! (at least, not in this particular 
contest)

Yeah, as we found out :)
 

few things.

Word bug

Akane: <It is a nice day. I think I'll walk to Ukyou's, it isn't
that far.>

Ukyou's.  It isn't

It's fine the way it is...

It's two sentences(independant clauses to be technical)  connected with a 
comma, which is a grammatical error.  It needs a connecting word or a ; 
or to be seperated.  

[The scene cuts as Akane and Ranma-chan disappear from the
kitchen. scene: STILL: The front hall, where Ukyou is taking off
her shoes while Kasumi waits. Ukyou is dressed in a pair of slacks
and a blue shirt, her hair 

Dressed to look male or female?

Doesn't matter...

It's an attitude thing...also, how Ranma sees Ukyou here will help 
imprint Ukyou in Ranma's mind, since she doesn't remember Ukyou.  And it 
shows how Ukyou is trying to project herself to Ranma.

You see to have had some trouble with . appearing at odd times and
some cases where commas exist that should be periods...Probably a
text corruption problem I'd guess...

It's abug in word 7 I hadn't noticed... I'll fix it with a kludge 
when I post more... and when I send it to the remailer.

This is why I write with Pico :)

Your cinemtographic skills are very impressive.  Best use of Script
format I've seen.

Errr... Two years of screen ed does that to you. You'll notice alot 
of camera angles apearing as well. :)

Ahh.  Good.  That would explain it.  I, the historian, don't get trained 
in these things :)

 

I rather disagree with the basic premise of this story (I still
don't think they should have succeeded in raping Ranma...not joe
ordinary thugs), but given that premise, the rest of the story flows
very well.

The premise will be explained later (this is a subject of much 
arguement on the ffml and has been mentioned before, but once the 
story is finished, all the question should be answered)

Good.
 

I'm not sure how well the Akane gets ki powers/Recovery of Ranma
story lines work together either...

It does... :)

Of course you think that, you're the author :)

(Thank you for not bringing Ami along! :)

Ami:  HEY!  That does it!  Next time, I'm dropping the planet on HIM!

Bailesu:  [whispers in her ear]

Ami:  When we get finished with a few things.

[They leave :)]

John Walter Biles :  MA-History, Ph.D Wannabe at U. Kansas         
ranma@falcon.cc.ukans.edu   http://falcon.cc.ukans.edu/~ranma/falcon.html 
                            http://www.dhp.com/~wraven/john/index.html
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sweet...I'm getting cavities!", "Welcome to hell, Sailor Moon!"--Queen Beryl