On Sat, 4 May 1996, Mike W. Loader wrote:

   I would have liked to have seen a bit more of Nodoka's training. As it
is, she seems almost two-dimentional.

	True, you do need to flesh out the entire crew to some extent 
(the scenes worked well, but more interaction would be good)
	One question you should try to at least try to address 'Elf: if
Genom suspects that the Stingrays are connected with the 'Sabres (see end
of part two), why did they not try to find either group in the following
months (Mackie at least did little to hide)? 

   One wonders if Shampoo will take up her puruit where she left off. With
a little more decorum, of course...

	After seeing what she did to that door, decorum has yet to be 
added to her vocabulary (knock-knock ;)
	As for Nene, I wonder what you're hinting about her future 
relationship with Linna <sly grin>

HTG (tearing hair out over summer)