You might want to know that several of the sections were cut off 
at the asterik lines.
	Please fix this and re-post.
	BTW, this is excellent work.

Maybe you could have the characters all looking at a watch or clock just
before the event.  That might help get the point across that all the parts
are happening simultaniosly.  Also, if Nabiki were to hear the doorbell, I
think it would help, too.

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