On Sun, 3 Mar 1996, Chan Wei Lik wrote:

  Even when she's not around, thougth Keiichi, Urd managed to stir a little

trouble.<<

I don't think "trouble" would be the right word here. Disturbance? No.... 
Damn... It's on the tip of my tounge but I can't make it out! Something 
along the lines of distraction and annoyance.

Nuisance?  Pest?  Thorn?  Hm...

  "Say, Saotome, don't panic, but..."

   "Panic?  What for, Tendo?"
   "... what if your wife watches the show?"<<

 The show is on cable. I recall you said that the Saotome house could 
not (did not?) have cable. Later in the fic, it is confirmed that the 
show is on cable. You need to clear this up. > 

did I get that muddled?  Tsk.  Right, I'll fix it.

  Kuno roared, "THAT DANKISH BEEF-WITTED PUTTOCK!!!"

Huh? What's that?

... And I owe much thanks to the Web Shakespearian Insult Server for
THAT particular piece of work.... ^_^

GIRL:     QUIIIIIIIIIIIIEEEEEEEEEEET!!!!!!!

Ouch! I hope they muffled it before airing it. Might blow out some 
sound systems! > 

Blowing sound systems... there's an idea.

  Mamoru was a crusader against the forces of darkness and the occasional

Youma.  It was just one of those things, and it was pretty obvious to her 
once she caught a glance at him.  She decided that things were best left 
alone there.<<

And she isn't even batting an eye on his love life? Amazing.....
There are some spelling errors here and there also. Not too many
luckily. Shouldn't be too hard to find. >

Aside from Usagi, what IS there to Tux-boy's love life?
(Yes, I'm fairly alien to Sailor Moon.)

thanks for the C&C

-rod m