At 08:03 PM 2/9/96 +1100, you wrote:

An Enjoyable story.

Thanks!  Always glad to hear that  ^_^

The beginning seems a bit perfunctory, and to be honest, I don't see that 
guy in the leisure suit is worth having later on - he has no reason to 
hang around and intervene in things - at least not that you've shown.

He was there to get the ball rolling for Ranma, and to make sure he'd made
the right choice.  Apparently astisfied with his choice, 'Leisure Suit' has
put himself on hiatus until he's either back in style, or tragedy strikes
(whichever comes first)

The training scenes come together nicely and the change from a average 
joe to a crash hot martial artist is reasonably handled.

Thanks.  Richard gets the credit for that.  His scene at the beginning of
part two of BCWYWF inspired what you read in 'Careful Destiny.'  Many
readers asked me to expand on it to provide some insight into the developing
relationship between Ranko and Ranma.  I'm almost satisfied with it, but
will probably add a little more to it when I have time.

But one point that isn't looked at at all is how the "other" Ranma's life 
was different to "our" Ranma's - there should be a least a few friends 
wondering why Ranma is ignoring them, and his family seemed awfully 
accepting of the changes in his behaviour - just little things like 
different habits and hobbies, promises to friends that "our" Ranma has no 
idea were actually made.  And the occasional thing that the family will 
take for granted, but Ranma has no idea about.

That will be looked at soon.  Ranma's life is about to get complicated
(understatement) as his 'past' begins catching up with him.  Life should be
interesting for the next few sections.  <BWAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!!>  ^_^

A minor quibble over dating as well - in the Manga/Anime timeline Genma 
took Ranma away from Nodoka at a very young age, no more than 3 years old 
at most.  Ranma was 6 when he met Ukyou for the first time.  Ranma signed 
the promise to become a mans-man in the Manga/Anime timeline by banging 
his hands on as he was too young to know what it was - 6 year olds can 
write (not well... but..) and Ranma should still have had memories of his 
mother if he had left her at 6 whereas in the M/A timeline, he knew 
nothing about her until they were introduced.

I have corrected that, thanks to your suggestion.  " ...when you were six...
" has been replaced with "... when you were really young ... "  Ain't
ambiguity great?  ^_^

Thanks for the C&C.  <more replies to come!>


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